My out was Sarah. The app itself just doesn't read Sarah to me? I'm not quite sure how to put a finger on it, but it's just... off. She's talking too freely about death and dismemberment, as if it was an everyday thing, and even if AS has that type of genre going for itself, Sarah is pretty normal a girl at the core. Even if she's experienced all of these things, I don't think it's something she'd mention at the drop of a hat and go on, as if she was talking about the rain. I don't see much of the Sarah mentioned in the canon section in the sample, and it doesn't do a lot to display her personality for me? It scrapes at the surface and not much more than that. I think there's more you could have played with, because as of right now, the sample is too generic and not very ... how should I put it ... personalized.