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( 志葉 丈瑠 ) Shiba Takeru ([personal profile] pussyfortono) wrote in [community profile] campfuckuvote2013-12-11 11:56 pm

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All I want right now is pumpkin pie.

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Character: A-ya
Series: Shuuen no Shiori
Character Age: High school aged, presumed 16-17
Canon: On the normal, unchanging campus, it suddenly occurred; A murder case where a body was cut open, right into two.
On the other side of the unsolved case, the rumor-loving high school students became involved in a certain ritual.
There is a legend about the Book of Demise, wherein every urban legend in the world is said to be recorded.
This book is accompanied by the Bookmark of Demise and whatever legend is marked by it will come true or so the rumors say.

A-ya is the quietest member of the group of four friends. Often unconcerned with getting along with others, he has a pessimistic attitude. His one true interest is the occult and starting rumors about others, often without considering their feelings. He does this to make his otherwise boring life seem more exciting.

Sample Entry:

Tell us about yourself in a few words.
I'm A-ya. There isn't much to say about myself other then I like interesting rumors. Even just seeing how ones I start grow. Lately I've often felt like someone is watching me, but it's probably just my imagination...

Why are you joining our happy community?
There have been many rumors about strange sounds and lights coming from this camp. I thouoght it might be something interesting so I decided to check it out. I find occult things interesting. Do I need much more reason?

What do you expect from your camp experience?
There isn't much that I'm expecting really...I just hope for something to relieve my boredom for a while.
Some interesting ghost stories would be nice, but I doubt I'll find anything real...

What do you expect from the campers here?
Nothing. People are all pretty similiar after all. It's not like I go out of my way to make friends or anything...That's more of something C-Ta would do.

What do you expect from the counselors?
They're just similiar to teachers at school right? They'll do what they have to do to earn their paychecks. A few of them might try to be "sympathetic" toward the campers and make friends, but that's all pretty normal, right?

Do you think you are good in a crisis? Why?
I suppose? It would probably depend on the type of crisis.I do not have many survival skills or anything since I am just a normal high schooler.
I try to stay level headed and objective though.

What if the crisis involved the end of the world? Please explain.
That seems very unlikely. Again, I'm not sure I could answer a question lik that accurately without more information.
Is there a certain way the world is going to end?
Or is it metaphorically ending like it does for most teenagers in a "crisis"?

Do you consider yourself squeamish? Please provide an example.
I've never really been in a situation to test that really...I do not think that I am? That is probably the best answer I can give right now...
Do you find these questions increasingly unnerving? Why/Why not?
No, I just find them vague. I mean, I guess they could be unnerving if you mean them literally? But things are going to be a little weird when you come to a place specifically to check out occult rumors, right?

Have you committed any crimes you were or should have been convicted from?
Crimes? No...The only thing of interest I have ever done is start a few rumors. Some people may have gotten upset over them, but I doubt that is anything worth sending me to jail over.
I suppose you are done with your questions now?...

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Character: Percy Jackson
Series: Percy Jackson and the Olympians
Character Age: 18

Canon: So, do you have dyslexia? Do the words on a page lift off and scatter, confusing you as to what you're reading? How about having ADHD and not being able to sit still? Yes to both? Then congratulations! You're probably a half-blood/demigod and one of your parents is either a Greek or Roman god. What does this mean? It means you've won the half-blood lottery and it means you've probably gotten strange monsters after your scent, wanting to kill you. And lastly? It probably means you should get to Camp Half-Blood right now before you get killed because it's the only safe place for you.

That is basically the story of Percy Jackson, son of Poseidon, Earthshaker, Stormbringer, Father of Horses and all that is watery and wet. Percy is not your typical teenager, he's a halfblood/demigod who starts off thinking he's a normal kid with dyslexia and ADHD. But surprise surprise, he's not and that's what makes him who he is. He's the kind of kid you can buddy around with, have fun with, but he's also very much a victim of his heritage; like the seas and oceans, he prefers to be unrestrained and free to do as he wishes. He's also a natural born leader, sassy and courageous, and he'll always have your back no matter what if you're his friend. He's not the type to let anyone down or leave anyone behind. He's a hero through and through and he'll do everything in his power to make things okay, not just for him but also for the people he cares about. And while he does have his flaws- like having a short temper and recklessly running headfirst into danger to help a friend, he does his best as a person to overcome them.


Sample Entry:

Tell us about yourself in a few words.
Hi, I'm Percy Jackson. I like long walks on the beach, swimming with hippocampi and talking to horses. I've got green eyes, nice hair and I'm also currently attached to a really great girl so could we not make this into a reality dating show now? Because that's what it sounds like you're telling me to do and boy do I hate it when people tell me what to do. But that's what I get for being a son of Poseidon. Sometimes you can't fight your heritage, sigh.

Why are you joining our happy community?
It's not like I want to join this place, but I'm sort of here to see if this camp is another place for demigods to train. We already have Camp Half-Blood and Camp Jupiter for the Greeks and Romans. So why not Norse? Or even Egyptian? Maybe I can buddy around with a child of Isis, see how they do what they do. I mean it’s CFUD, Camp For Unrelated Demigods. Makes sense, right?

Do you think you are good in a crisis? Why?
Uh, my instincts are sort of wired for crisis. I'm a half-blood who's got ADHD, which really translates into me not wanting to sit still because every nerve is basically telling me to duke it out and fight with whoever I need to fight. So throw a minotaur at me, throw an empousa even, but please let it not be Kelli the cheerleader. Every time I see a cheerleader now, I tense up.

What if the crisis involved the end of the world? Please explain.
Been there, done that, got the t-shirt. In fact, I have five t-shirts. I also have a necklace marking every year I've saved both the world and Olympus. Well, that's a bit of a stretch, I also had help from a lot of my friends. We've gone on quest after quest and pretty much completed them all, ensuring the safety of all and etc and etc.

Do you consider yourself squeamish? Please provide an example.
Uh, after my totally not so awesome tour of Tartarus? No. Did you know re-killing things down there basically requires you to go up to a giant blister and pop it before the monster inside it gets reborn? Yeah, no, I am not even joking with you on that one. I've done it and I managed not to lose my lunch.

Can you swim? Y/N Do you even need to ask? Hello, son of Poseidon here!
- Could you still do it under extreme distress? Y/N I could stay underwater forever, fighting monsters in the deep because, uh, hello! Son of Poseidon!
-- While dragging someone else to shore? Y/N Now you're just beating a dead horse, which is really bad considering how much I like horses.
--- While something, let’s say a tentacle, tries to drag you under? Y/N No, really, I hate to sound like a broken record but I could pretty much do anything underwater because I can breathe underwater. If a tentacle grabs me, I could eat breakfast while cutting it off and then I could chill with Ariel and Flounder in the deep blue seas.
---- How would you handle that situation? I just told you, man!

What is your job here at CFUD? What do you think that means?
Okay, I've realized something. This is a quiz, isn't it? You're trying to quiz me. I'm so not good with quizzes. Could we just skip this last question? Because I've kind of got other stuff to do right now that requires saving the world and Olympus yet again. So I'm outtie, see ya.

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Character: Hiccup Horrendous Haddock III
Series: How to Train Your Dragon
Character Age: 15-ish

Canon: Do you like dragons? Well, there was a time the Vikings on Berk didn’t. Dragons once raided the island, attacking its stubborn, brash inhabitants. Killing a dragon was a mark of status and a rite of passage. But one boy and his dragon changed that when Hiccup sought to become the Viking his father, the chief, expected of him. He downed a Night Fury, but he couldn’t--wouldn’t--kill him. Through an unlikely adventure, Hiccup befriended that dragon, named him Toothless, and showed everyone that dragons were much more than they thought. Hiccup lost a foot in the ensuing battle, but he gained a friend. Vikings and dragons banded together, and now Berk is home to the dragons and their riders.

Hiccup is awkward in every sense of the word. He’s scrawny, leaving him his intelligence and innovation to survive. He has created countless inventions in the back of the forge, many of them failing spectacularly, but inventions nonetheless! The target of constant bullying, Hiccup’s developed self-deprecating sarcasm to protect himself. He was once Berk’s worst Viking, a constant disappointment to his father. Hence the major confidence issues. But now he puts his talents to use: art, mechanics, riding, leadership, and his innate ability to bond with dragons. Through them, he’s made quite a few friends. And some of them are even human!


Sample Entry:
Tell us about yourself in a few words.
What, right now? Um, hi. I’m Hiccup. Viking and dragon rider. And completely without my dragon, of course. Maybe you’ve seen him. He’s stream-lined, black, and ten meters of bad attitude. If you’re missing any sheep or fish, it’s probably him. Aaaaaand I can totally replace that if that’s the case.

Why are you joining our happy community?
Uhh wait, join? Nobody said anything about joining. I was just doing a fly-by when someone got it in his head to land here. Then there was this weird shimmery wall thing, and-- Look, I get into enough trouble. If you just show me the way, I’ll be out of your hair! Or what’s . . . left of it, anyway. Since you don’t have much of a head to speak of. But when you live with Vikings who like to throw around big pointy things, you see a lot of that. So it’s cool. Really, it’s a good look for you.

What do you expect from your camp experience?
This is gonna be one of those “Hiccup was heroically captured by the bad guys” things again, isn’t it. That’s just great. Well, at least I’m used to it. I guess I expect to not get eaten by whatever’s attached to the massive tentacle waving at me. And then maybe learn about other places. I’ve never left Berk and the many colorful islands surrounding it. Maybe there are new species of dragons here, just waiting to be found! Then I can train them and fly far, far away from this place and the weird, not-so-lively guys and wow I think they’re actually rotting. Yeah. Okay.

Why are you a valuable asset to this camp?
Me, a valuable asset? Uh, I can fix stuff I guess. I’m pretty good with my hands when I’m not, y’know, making things explode or . . . catch fire. Or fire on innocent bystanders. Or making something with a serious flaw that sends me spiraling through the sky and falling to my death. I’m still working on that. Actually, no, it’s probably best if you don’t keep me around. It would be safer for everyone involved.

Do you think you are good in a crisis? Why?
Yeah, I guess so. I mean, everyone took down that huge dragon, the Red Death, together. And I kind of helped. So, you know, I could be a little helpful. Probably. I didn’t exactly faint at the first sign of trouble. Nope, I just fell off my dragon and into a nice, fire-y explosion. But hey! I got a nice souvenir out of it. My metal foot makes a nice fashion statement, don’tcha think? Yeah, I didn’t think so either.

What if the crisis involved the end of the world? Please explain.
Um, end of the world? That’s a little dramatic, don’t ya think? The world’s not gonna end just because your village gets a little on fire. Believe me, I know how that goes. Dragons plus lots of wooden houses equals lots of very new houses. You’ll live.

If there was a good dog and a criminal both hanging from a cliff and you could only save one, which would you save and why?
Um, hello. Dragons. Dragon rider. Cliffs aren’t really a problem for me. That is, if there’s a dragon around. Otherwise I’m kind of useless. These big, strong muscles couldn’t lift a sheep without it crushing me. So I guess if I didn’t have Toothless, the criminal, the dog, and me would all fall to our deaths. Lovely thought, thank you for that.

Do you have a five year plan in mind?
I’m thinking not getting killed and flying wherever I want sounds good. Other than that, I’m not really gunning for anything special. Though I guess by then I’ll be married. The chief’s son and all, I’m kind of expected to step up and take charge eventually. . . . Ugh, maybe I can be the next village hermit instead. I’ll give all my sheep really horrible, brainless names. There’s no way Berk could handle all of . . . this. Sooooo let’s not and say you never asked me that question, okay?

If you could choose to bring three objects to a desert island, what would you bring and why?
My riding gear, a book, and a basket of fish. You didn’t say I couldn’t hold anything in my three objects. And no, Toothless doesn’t count as an object. That’s just rude. He’s my friend, not a knick-knack. Actually, a desert island sounds pretty good right now. Considering, you know, flying. Can we do that instead? Let’s do that instead. As fun as this entirely pointless survey is.

Can you perform a flawless headshot? If not, and if your life depended on it, how many hours a week would you be willing to spend on the shooting range?
Uhh yeah, no. I’d really rather not handle anything other than a knife and whatever I come up with, if it’s all the same to you. And they’re pretty handy for things other than, y’know, killing people. I’m just gonna go. Over there. And find my own way out. Thank you so much, you’ve been a real help. And uh, good luck on your own loss-of-limbs situation. Haaaaah. Awkward.

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Character: Toothless
Series: How to Train Your Dragon
Character Age: Dragon?

Canon: The dragons just can't catch a break. From the dangerous monster lurking under their island to the mob of vikings hellbent on their eradication, they're really stuck between a rock and a hard place when it comes to survival. The story follows a talented Night Fury species dragon eventually dubbed Toothless and an awkward young viking with much to prove named Hiccup. After an injury leaves Toothless trapped and unable to fly, he's forced to rely on Hiccup for survival -- the son of that viking mob's leader. After many trials they form an unlikely friendship and understanding. With a prosthetic attachment and lots of practice, they're able to take to the skies as a team and show both sides that dragons and humans can live peacefully together. ...And they'll have to cooperate because that monster under the island is hungry and doesn't discriminate when it comes to meal time.

Toothless has a good reason to be wary of humans. Lightning fast and pinpoint accurate with his attacks, he's still one of the smallest species of dragons. Though when trust is gained, he is absolutely loyal -- proving a better and more faithful ally to Hiccup than his own family or tribe at times. He shows that he can understand humans, interacting with them as equals. Dry and sarcastic in his own way, he doesn't let his young friend get away with anything. ...Though his moods can usually be tempered with a bribe of nice, fresh fish.


Sample:

[The dragon squints at the packet of paper filled with questions. Silly humans and their bureaucracy. After a glance around and he spies just what he needs. A thin, low branch is wrenched off a nearby tree and the dragon takes a deep breath, holds it, and then shoots out a tiny focused ball of flame that ignites one end. It burns for a moment before he snubs it out and voilá, a pencil!

Now, the first question... Who is he? Settling in and he starts a detailed charcoal self-portrait. An appraising eye roams over the art when he finishes and before the page is flipped he decides to add a smiley face. It's good to seem approachable.

Why is he here? Well that's a boring question. It's pulled out of the stack , balled up, and tossed into the river to keep the piranhas entertained.

Can you perform a flawless headshot? The dragon abruptly sits straight, puffed up indignantly. Just who do they think they're asking? Another deep breath and he lets loose on the packet to show them "flawless headshot", only remembering at the last moment that it needs to be turned in. A squeak as he bites off most of the flaming ball, quickly stomping out the burnt packet. ...He examines the damage and decides that really it's not too bad. There were too many questions anyway.

Flipping charred, crumbling pages until he finds one he can read. Do you consider yourself squeamish? Cat-like eyes squint, offended. He's the fastest flying, most dangerous and well-feared dragon that comes like a shadow in the night! He's about to scratch out the words when a thought comes to mind and he changes the stroke to a looping striped line. Lips curl in distaste at the messy picture and what it represents -- eels are horrible creatures.

Next... Declare any pets that you may bring with you? The dragon thinks a moment before he gets to work, wings tucking in against him. A big circle is drawn for the head and then a stick figure body. He tsks and decides that the figure is too generic. No one would know that's Hiccup. So an oversized horned helmet that comes down over his eyes is added, shaggy hair, and the dragon erases the stick arms to make them skinnier.

Finally the end. Can he cook? Of course he can! Back hunches and he spits up a large, slimy fish head, right onto the center of a page. A firm nod - perfect.]

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Character: Protagonist (“Yuki, Makoto” in the film)
Series: Persona 3 [Wikipedia]
Character Age: 16-17

Canon: You’re a transfer student who just moved into the city. You just got off the train and the clock strikes midnight. Suddenly, the sky turns green, everyone’s turned into coffins and also, you get attacked by a large, shadowy monster. In response, you instinctively summon the physical manifestation of your soul (accomplished by shooting yourself in the face), which you use to defeat the monster, and an hour later everything goes back to normal, so all’s good. Except it’s not, and you kind of have to keep doing this for the next year or so while simultaneously juggling school and your social life. The hour of terror you experienced and will keep on experiencing is called the Dark Hour, the monster was called a Shadow and the power you used is called Persona. Also, your school transforms into a giant, ominous death tower called Tartarus that you have to traverse every other night.

This is Makoto’s life in a nutshell. A quiet young man, his calm demeanor, decisiveness and skill in battle were what led to him being chosen to be the field leader of S.E.E.S., a ragtag group of Persona Users who seek to learn the mysteries of the Dark Hour, and possibly even end it for good. While he outwardly seems to have little interest in his surroundings, his cool, unfazed exterior belies a kind, compassionate soul who cares deeply for his friends, supporting them in their times of need to even putting his life on the life for them. Of course, while not impatient, he won’t exactly hesitate to say so if you’re being annoying either.


Sample Entry:

Tell us about yourself in a few words.
Yuki Makoto. I’m a second year at Gekkoukan High School, Class F, and a member of the student council, kendo club, photography club, fashion club and the Specialized Extracurricular Execution Squad. ... Don't worry about that last one.

As for hobbies, I don’t really have any in particular, aside from club activities. Just walking around and talking to people is usually enough for me. I do occasionally play an online game on holidays, though.

Why are you joining our happy community?
That's what I'd like to know. … Also, I don’t particularly remember saying I’d join, either.

If there was a good dog and a criminal both hanging from a cliff and you could only save one, which would you save and why?
Is there a reason I can’t save both? Even if I can’t, I can still at least try. At the very least, I’m not interested in seeing anyone die right before my eyes. Plus, Koromaru would probably get angry at me if I let the dog fall.

Do you think you are good in a crisis? Why?
It would depend on the crisis, but I can more or less handle myself. I’d have to know what I’m up against first, but I can probably figure it out as I’m dealing with it. I’ve learned over the past year that being able to think on your feet is a pretty convenient skill to have.

What if the crisis involved the end of the world? Please explain.
The end of the world, is it...? That’s a little vague, but I guess I’d just do what I can. Even if the end is inevitable, and even if there’s supposedly nothing we can do to stop it, that’s still no reason to just give up and accept it.

… And besides, I’m not alone. Even if my friends aren’t physically here, they’re still with me by my side, supporting me. As long as we collect our resolve and face forward together with determination, I’m sure it would all work out somehow. That’s just the feeling I have.

Can you perform a flawless headshot?
… In a manner of speaking, I guess.

Do you find these questions increasingly unnerving? Why/Why not?
I don’t really care.

Can I go home now? It’s a school night and I’m getting kind of hungry...

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Character: Virginia “Pepper” Potts
Series: Marvel Cinematic Universe
Character Age: 37
Job: Official Stark Handler

Canon: After being abducted in Afghanistan, Tony Stark develops the preliminary version of the Iron Man suit to aid in his escape. Thus, a legacy is born; so cue the rock music, fireworks and a line of press because things just got more exciting. Problem is, Tony isn’t your typical superhero. His narcissistic personality doesn’t allow him to play well with others and causes him to reveal his secret identity early in the game. Though the resulting limelight causes him to flourish, it also causes trouble for Stark Industries and those close to him. In the midst of the chaos Tony stirs up, keeping him in line and sane is Pepper Potts—his assistant-cum-CEO, who keeps everything running.

Pepper takes crap from no one. Not even her own boss. In the face of potential danger, she isn’t the type to back down, especially if others are at risk. While she is no god or super soldier, she’s no pushover, either. She is intelligent and determined. She is strong-willed, thorough and extremely competent. Though her patience and understanding have been tried on multiple occasions, she has proven to be a faithful, trustworthy friend and ally.


Sample Entry:

Tell us about yourself in a few words.

My name is Virginia Potts, but you can call me Pepper. I’m currently the CEO for Stark Industries, which consumes most of my time. My apologies that it took a bit to find a time slot that would allow me to fly out here.

Do you have a five year plan in mind?

I did have a five year plan in mind, but then I started working for the infamous Tony Stark. So, it’s hard to have any definitive plans. For now, I’m just trying to keep Stark Industries up and running as smoothly as possible.

What is your job here at CFUD? What do you think that means?

I’m here to do what? Okay, fine. I’ll humor the title until we can discuss the terms of our contract. I’m assuming it means that Tony has taken a job without my knowledge and is currently being quite unreasonable. There will probably be an excuse attached. What I’m hoping is that I’ll be coming here to take care of more important business matters. Perhaps this camp is looking for some kind of sponsorship or promotions? We’ll have to see what they have in mind and consider the options.

Why are you joining our happy community?

Joining your community? This is only temporary until I get back to my normal job. Think of it as a quick business trip. If I had known what my official job title was supposed to be here, I might have reconsidered my position. It seems that you have misunderstood my intentions for this visit to your camp. I hope we can resolve this issue as fast as possible and in a civil manner.

Do you consider yourself squeamish? Please provide an example.

Somewhat. Though, after having my hand in Tony’s— You know what? How about we don't talk about this. It was disgusting and I'd like to never experience it again. Let's leave it at that.

Would you be able to dispose of the flesh of the undead? How?

Excuse me? What kind of questionnaire is this? I know a lot of strange things have been going on, but you cannot tell me there are undead starting to show up. It was hard enough believing aliens were invading New York, but now you’re claiming there are zombies in the mix.

Do you find these questions increasingly unnerving? Why/Why not?

Do you ask everyone who comes here these questions? It’s bad enough to ask them of adults, but there are children here. I want to speak to whoever is in charge. I’ve got a lot more work ahead of me than I initially planned.

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on_thin_ice: (Now you know me)

[personal profile] on_thin_ice 2013-12-12 05:03 am (UTC)(link)
holy shit this round
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[personal profile] redmarksthespot 2013-12-12 05:15 am (UTC)(link)
Hot damn this round.

A-ya was out! The canon was extremely bare bones. I'm not really sure what is what. The first paragraph is cool, but it doesn't tell me anything about world, plot, characters, anything. There's a book and you can mark things that come true. That's it. Going straight from there and saying that "A-ya is the quietest of the friends" does nothing for me if I know nothing about the friends or world.

There does seem to be a voice, and I will certainly reread in the morning! But there is just so little information that I am not sure what I am looking at right now.
ognesperanza: (you found x1 dere)

[personal profile] ognesperanza 2013-12-12 05:21 am (UTC)(link)
PERCYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY

come to me and let me ruin your life

percy

(Anonymous) 2013-12-12 05:22 am (UTC)(link)
you've already ruined it at least three times
ognesperanza: (take a look at my life)

[personal profile] ognesperanza 2013-12-12 05:27 am (UTC)(link)
but i can do better than that, i just know it!! IF YOU'D GIVE ME A CHANCE
ognesperanza: (wandering alone looking fa~bu~lou~s)

[personal profile] ognesperanza 2013-12-12 05:26 am (UTC)(link)
THAT BEING SAID, that's an OUT for A-ya, and IN for everyone else! SUPERB, GUYS! Pepper and Toothless especially, you guys are perf. (not you though, Percy, get out) Makoto, that headshot joke was priceless and i love you for it.

A-ya, i felt like your app was pretty bare-bones. you definitely hit on all the points in your personality section, but...all you said is basically quiet, likes gossip and the occult, and doesn't want life to be boring. and while you had quite a few spelling errors, i could forgive that for voice. but i didn't really hear one. he's pretty flat here, and i feel like there could be more. that said, i'm completely canon blind! so maybe he really is like that. but with as sparse as your canon and personality section is, that's all i have to go on. the canon section is cool, but you didn't really explain much. all i know is that A-ya is part of a group of kids that deals with strange happenings. so, i'm really just looking for more. i'm not sure if that...made sense? but i tried.

A-ya

(Anonymous) 2013-12-12 05:28 am (UTC)(link)
Honestly A-ya really is a pretty unemotional character. I mean, I see where you guys are coming from with the comments. But his personality is just kind of like that.
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[personal profile] sniptuck 2013-12-12 05:30 am (UTC)(link)
omg this round god bless
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[personal profile] andwatchmeburn 2013-12-12 05:57 am (UTC)(link)
This round eeeeeeee dhfhgdgfh ♥
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[personal profile] breachedwhale 2013-12-12 06:35 am (UTC)(link)
A-ya, sorry it's an out. I understand the character is kind of an unemotional character, but it still seems very bare. Others get in's.

(Cris, you don't get pie.)
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[personal profile] ognesperanza 2013-12-12 06:36 am (UTC)(link)
girls, girls, please... the bed is right over there.
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[personal profile] breachedwhale 2013-12-12 06:37 am (UTC)(link)
excuse you, pretty princess.
ognesperanza: (i will cut you)

[personal profile] ognesperanza 2013-12-12 06:37 am (UTC)(link)
excuse.

GHOST KING. GHOST KING
breachedwhale: <lj user=nagito> @ <lj comm=awkward> (unless it's like naked twister ;))

[personal profile] breachedwhale 2013-12-12 06:38 am (UTC)(link)
princess of candyland
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[personal profile] ognesperanza 2013-12-12 06:39 am (UTC)(link)
i will end you

[personal profile] redacts 2013-12-12 08:15 am (UTC)(link)
A-ya was my out!

I voted out because as someone who is completely canon-blind, I found it very hard to follow the application and really discern the voice from it. It didn't give me a sense of the character! Part of that is because the canon section is lacking. I'm not familiar with Shuuen no Shiori and clicking the series link didn't help me much since it was mostly translations and whatnot. When I read applications, I look to the canon section to give me an idea of where this character is coming from, who they are, and what I should be expecting from the voice itself in the actual application. There wasn't much to go off of in terms of what the canon was, if that makes sense? Like, what does this group do exactly? What's going on with the murder? What is relevant and what isn't? As a canon-blind reader, it helps me to know what kind of "world" this character comes from.

Something else that really helps in the canon is an elaboration on who this character is. You mentioned that he's unemotional in your comment. That's a good start! That should be included in the canon. Things like how a character interacts in social settings — you mentioned he had a pessimistic attitude and liked to start rumors regardless of people's feelings, for example. Tell us more about that! Paint a fuller picture of the character, show us who this kid is supposed to be. Is there something that drives him to be this way or is he who he is Just Because? Do they change at all or are they the sort that doesn't really . . . care, you know? Tell us these things! It helps the canon blind reader understand who this character is supposed to be and what their voice is supposed to be like. It doesn't matter if they're unemotional or BURSTING WITH ENERGY!, as long as you really give the reader an idea of how it should go.

As for the application itself, it felt very bland and choppy to me. Some of the phrasing was a bit awkward, which jarred me out of the application and made it hard to discern a voice. That said, you definitely had some interesting ideas in here and I feel like if you'd focused more on those, you could have really brought out A-ya's voice and shone. The counselor answer, for example! I really liked that, it seemed to fit what you had described. In general, you seemed to use a lot of questions and answered them very shortly which, again, came across as choppy. Not all characters are talkers and it's definitely fine to use a lot of questions and have short answers, but the answers that were given here seemed to be very similar. That can come across as bland when it comes up again and again, which is why I usually recommend focusing on just a few questions and really letting the character's personality shine through.

There were a few typos as well, which happens! But having a couple in there did pull me out of the app while I was reading.

I hope that helps!
Edited 2013-12-12 08:15 (UTC)